帮忙修改一下这篇英语作文。

第一段：

1. complaint 为名词，应换成complain。because she is my former deskmate..... 此句必须要有is ，其他表达正确。

第二段：

    1.impudence为名词，用法错误。改为形容词impudent，表示厚颜无耻的，其后应加一单词person。

    2. 第三四句可以合并，I hate selfish persons like her. 

    3. 去掉when，After making mistakes, she is always trying to get out of her responsibility.  后面的句子有点中式英语了，这里我就不一一纠正了。

    4. 某一天应该用some day, 这段的大概意思就是：when we were to sleep, she took a bath for forty minutes and then spoke with her boyfriend on the phone, which annoyed me so much. However, she refused to go outside and ignored our feelings.

  希望能帮助到你！