高分悬赏，修改一句英文

的确有些别扭，但你的词汇掌握还是可以的，稍微改下顺序即可
我建议将影片放在前面，被该部影片的某些细节吸引哪些细节放在影片后面更符合思维逻辑，另这些细节也要按他们吸引你的主次顺序（先画面、音效、音乐、情节等一一来过）
The Dinosaur Fly By也有的，是侏罗纪公园3，第一部（是你小时候看的）应该是Jurassic Park

When I was very young, I was deeply impressed by the renowned movie "Jurassic Park", attracted by its perfect production such as fascinating motion pictures, exciting sonic effects, moving original music, a tightknit plot, and so on.
译文是：在我很小的时候，我就对著名影片“侏罗纪公园”印象深刻，被影片的完美制作吸引，诸如：刺激的动作画面和声音音效、感人的原创音乐、紧凑的故事情节等等。

When I was very young, I was deeply attracted not only by the original music“The Dinosaur Fly By”,but also by the perfect production, the fascinating sonic effect and so on .
电影名字是：The Dinosaur Fly，已经更正完毕，是正确的了。
已经根据你的补充更正。

其实你可不可以用中文表达一下你的意思？我有点看不太懂你这个句子。
When I was very young, I was deeply attracted by the orignal music which is known as "The Dinosaur Fly By" from the renowned motion picture, Jurassic Park.The perfect production and the fascinating sonic effect of this movie had also stricken my heart.