请英语高手帮我修改一下我的作文

你好，我也是闪电狗的爱好者，但我也只是个学生，可能我还不能向老师一样为你指出错误，但是我认为有些句子这样修改可能更好，你可以参考一下。
标题：Disney’s first CG movie--Bolt
1. Bolt is an American white shepherd, who plays a heroic dog in a TV show and has some trouble in recognizing that he doesn't have superpowers.
修改为：Bolt,a white American shepherd,played a heroic dog in a TV show and had some trouble in recognizing that he didn't have superpowers.
2.he understood that he didn’t have superpower and the show is not real.
修改为:he realized that he didn’t have any superpower.Furthermore,the show he has played a super dog was not real.
3.Finally, Bolt, Mittens and Rhino live a happy with Bolt’s person.
修改为:Finally, Bolt ,with Mittens and Rhino ,lived a happy life with penny's family.
4.I really like these three animals, because they are so lovely, clever and brave. There is a classic dialogues,
修改为:I really admire these three animals with their cuteness,cleverness,braveness
5.There is a classic dialogues,
修改为:Following are some classic dialogues:
6.He realizes he is a superdog that can always protect his person with his superpower. (这句和上文的逻辑联系不太紧密)
修改为:He had thought he was a superdog and naturely could protect his master with his superpower.

恩,有些语法错误,前后时态要一致,句式最好丰富些，多用用关联词．
我修改了一下，希望大番薯和小地瓜可以评论下，好让我进行修改．
Disney’s first CG movie--Bolt
－－Do you know a superdog named Bolt? Bolt is the story of a Hollywood dog who is the star of the most popular show centering around his adventures saving his owner Penny from the evil Green Eyed Man.
－－unfortunately,The great hero,bolt, had thought he was a superdog and naturely could protect his master with his superpower.
One day he separated from the studio by accident,Bolt thought he must find a way back to Hollywood to save Penny. On his long way home, he met a female cat named Mittens.Then,a hamster,in a plastic ball,named Rhino joined their adventure.As Bolt Gradually came to the realization that he didn’t have any superpower.Furthermore,the show he has played a super dog was not real. Though Bolt had been in the sense of loss, with the help of the cat and hamster, Bolt went back at last.Finally,his owener,penny was surrounded by dangers, Bolt never lost his balance and saved her.At the end of the film,to our gladness, Bolt ,with Mittens and Rhino ,lived a happy life with penny's family.
－－I really admire these three animals with their cuteness,clverness,braveness and loyalism.Following are some classic dialogues:Bolt：“There will be danger.”

Rhino：“I eat danger for breakfast！”

Bolt：“Are you hungry？”

Rhino：“Starving！”
That’s right. We shouldn’t be scared of danger.
花了我一个多小时．．．
最后，欢迎到闪电狗来，有问题我为您解答．

这是xenomorph001我随便注册的一个 ,上面超过了修改上限
最后一句打错了,是说最后，欢迎到百度的闪电狗吧来，有问题我为您解答